Is this a good format for a 1 page stock pitch?

1. 1 sentence recommendation with time frame and price target

2 introduction: overview of what the business does, p/e and competitor average p/e, eps and competitor average eps, valuation multiples, revenue growth, market share

1. Thesis/catalysts: 2-3 main reasons why I think the stock will rise, why these reasons haven’t been priced in yet

   1. valuation: 3 year time frame valuation with information DCF

2. Risks and mitigants

   Does this look ok? Should I make the thesis and catalysts separate? Also, should I include pe/eps and growth figures and key multiples in background or valuation?